Tuesday, March 16, 2010

Expressionless ...

Walking along the aisle he noticed her. She wore an exquisite top with a short skirt. His eyes widened appreciating her beauty.

“You’re the most beautiful girl I’ve ever seen.” he said to her. There was no response.

He laughed.

“Too bad a poster can’t talk... wanted to see her blush and smile a bit.”

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This is really, my first try on 55 word fiction. Sorry if it sounds too common... it's a pain in the neck for me to write anything with a small word limit.

And I guess the protagonist is a lonely dreamer devoid of the joys of reality... or something like that.

12 comments:

Abhinav said...

less words but still its good. :) some may find it better than the short stories you have written.

keep writing.

☆Tharangni☆ said...

wow!!! It's reallly nice!!! Loved it!!! best one of all the 55-word fiction stories i've ever read!!!! :)

♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ ayu ♫ Ƹ̵̡Ӝ̵̨̄Ʒ ♫ said...

its nice..i never thought that the girl was just in the poster and not the real one..:P

the ending is very nice ^_^

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Samadrita said...

The ending got me.Very good for a first :)
Keep writing!

Leona said...

Somehow the guy freaks me out. XD

Good job, though. I was thinking how rude he was for saying that to a girl directly, and I didn't expect it to be a poster.

Selenium said...

@Abhinav ::> Thanks, and if my college don't kill me... yes, I'll continue writing

@Tharangi ::> Thank You, thank you thank you!!! >_<

@Ayu ::> thanks :)

@Samadrita ::> Thanks :D I'll keep writing...

@Leona ::> The Guy is supposed to be a freak... (modeled on someone in my hostel). Thanks for the compliments and the comment :)

☆Tharangni☆ said...

>>In reply to my post<<
@Selenium: Yep! all diary writers love their diaries and sometimes feel the same way! :)

Koo said...

Hey, this is nice! I would say it's a great take on 55 fiction :)

-Koo
kuueen.blogspot.com

Sorcerer said...

Nice one..
love such short writeups!

The Laughing Man said...

Super stuff there Selenium...

☆Tharangni☆ said...

Hey! You have an award from my blog! :)
Award For You.

Ranko said...

:D