Walking along the aisle he noticed her. She wore an exquisite top with a short skirt. His eyes widened appreciating her beauty.
“You’re the most beautiful girl I’ve ever seen.” he said to her. There was no response.
He laughed.
“Too bad a poster can’t talk... wanted to see her blush and smile a bit.”
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This is really, my first try on 55 word fiction. Sorry if it sounds too common... it's a pain in the neck for me to write anything with a small word limit.
And I guess the protagonist is a lonely dreamer devoid of the joys of reality... or something like that.
11 comments:
less words but still its good. :) some may find it better than the short stories you have written.
keep writing.
wow!!! It's reallly nice!!! Loved it!!! best one of all the 55-word fiction stories i've ever read!!!! :)
The ending got me.Very good for a first :)
Keep writing!
Somehow the guy freaks me out. XD
Good job, though. I was thinking how rude he was for saying that to a girl directly, and I didn't expect it to be a poster.
@Abhinav ::> Thanks, and if my college don't kill me... yes, I'll continue writing
@Tharangi ::> Thank You, thank you thank you!!! >_<
@Ayu ::> thanks :)
@Samadrita ::> Thanks :D I'll keep writing...
@Leona ::> The Guy is supposed to be a freak... (modeled on someone in my hostel). Thanks for the compliments and the comment :)
>>In reply to my post<<
@Selenium: Yep! all diary writers love their diaries and sometimes feel the same way! :)
Hey, this is nice! I would say it's a great take on 55 fiction :)
-Koo
kuueen.blogspot.com
Nice one..
love such short writeups!
Super stuff there Selenium...
Hey! You have an award from my blog! :)
Award For You.
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