Saturday, August 7, 2010

The Script - Alpha Edition...

Well... Like I said in my last post... I and my friend Mr. V were working on a script for a short movie we were planning to make. Like Mr. K (the person who'll direct this movie...) said... this script is a good mix of Warchosky Brothers and Cohen Brothers with the same unexpectedness of Hitchcock. Then Mr. V said that he intended to look into small details like Stanley Kubrick.

So, this is something I wrote after collecting our ideas. As of today, this is not a final script, but this is what our script would finally follow. Let's see (yes, it's an open challenge) how many understand what actually happened here. :D
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Chimera
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In Intro.... Heavy Atmospheric music.

Single bed Bedroom. Untidy table. Tidy room otherwise. An abstract painting hanging from the wall at one corner of the screen. A large sea map on the other corner of the screen, having many large and small red crosses and dotted and dark lines.
Alarm clock rings. Mr. M wakes up. Rubs his sleepy eyes and taps the alarm clock shut.

Bathroom Scene. Mr. M comes inside the bathroom and splashes his face in the sink.

Next scene. He sits on his untidy table. Grabs his expensive looking smart-phone/cellphone. Makes a call.

Mr. M - Hey. What's the news today. Heh? 40 120... any more coordinates... ya man... every one of them. Don't leave even one.... ya go on.
Mr. M begins to take notes

Phone rings. This time Mr. M is on the map hung on the wall.

Mr. M - Ya. Note the hot spots... ya... starts at 40 120 and...
Music goes louder/heavier and voice is muted.

Music continues and scene follows... (to be shown within 20 seconds) (It would be preferred from the authors point on view that Ms. A is shown in the background one way or the other.)

1. He takes home deliveries for lunch.
2. A scene where he is going down the staircase to a kiosk where he buys and smokes cigarettes.
3. He is shown smoking while marking on maps.
4. Shown taking home deliveries again.
5. Shown talking on phone while sitting on the table and smoking.
6. Shown taking home deliveries again.


The Music dies and the camera goes into the door and clips out into the corridor of the building focusing on the door in front. Out from the door comes out a girl. Same age group as Mr. M. She is shown having a bright smile on her face and tip toeing out of the door and down the stairs.
Chirpy and happy music starts.
Cellphone rings and she picks it up.

Ms. A - Hello? Ah yes sweetie I know I'm late. But you know Mrs. Sharma who lives on 2nd floor... ya the one with the fat black cat... he he he... well she came up and asked me to help her with something. I didn't feel like putting her down... oohh... no... don't worry. I'm on my way. I won't miss the fun... I promise.

She walks out of the building hand-waving the guard and he slightly bows down his head to return her greeting.

Music goes louder and scenes follow.... (To be shown within 20 seconds) (It would be preferred from the authors point on view that Mr. M is shown in the background one way or the other.)

1. She is shown talking on the phone while shopping.
2. Goes downstairs to the kiosk to buy cornetto.
3. Shown talking on phone with a cola in her hands.
4. Shown taking home deliveries
5. Shown saying hello, talking and then smiling with a light laugh, while going down stairs.
6. Shown taking home deliveries.

Music cuts back to a soft, preferably melancholic piano tone

Mr. M in bedroom on the table. Reaches out for a box of cigarettes and then looks at it, makes a frustrated expression while shaking the box.

Mr. M gets up and goes out. Next scene is of the Kiosk where he orders a whole pack. Mr. I who is also smoking intervenes.

Mr. I - Hello there. You live in No. XXX right?
Mr. M - Err... Yes?
Mr. I - Well, I'm your new neighbor. I moved in just yesterday. I had little time due to shifting and all, so I couldn't say hello to you earlier.
Mr. M - I see.

Mr. M doesn't say anything for 10 seconds and there is silence between the two.

Mr. M - You also have another neighbor. Keep away from that woman. She is very friendly but may have ulterior motives.
Mr. I - Is that so?

Another 5 seconds of silence

Ms. A comes into the scene

Ms. A - So, New neighbor. Set into the society yet?
Mr. I - Ah! Well, sort of. But I've yet to meet others living in this society. I hope to meet and know them soon.
Ms. A - Well. Here I am.
Mr. I - (Laughs) Well well. Indeed. So. Wanna join in for a cup of coffee or tea?
Ms. A - Ah! But I have some chores to do. I can't accept your invitation now.
Mr. I - Is that so? Well, don't worry. It won't take even 5 minutes to prepare and then, it's just a cup of tea. I won't hold you for any more than 15 minutes.
Ms. A - Hm... well. If you insist so much I think I'll come.
Mr. I - Good. I have some rare blend of coffee I'm sure you'll definitely enjoy. You won't regret it.
Ms. A - OK. Let's go.

Mr. M has his head hung low... face palming... and taking sideways glace at Ms. A.


Scene fades out

Scene fades in where Ms. A sits on the sofa and And scene follows Mr. I going into the kitchen.

Mr. I - I'll be with you in a minute.

Scene goes up-to the window where we see the silhouette or faint image of a man. Then the scene pans back and Ms. A is sitting on the sofa.

Ms. A - So. What do you do?
Mr. I - Make coffee for guests. (Laughs)
Ms. A - Ah! Yes. Indeed. (Laughs as well...)
Mr. I - But on a serious note. I'm a Senior Inspector.
Ms. A - Ah! Police. Must be a fun life.

Mr. I comes into the scene with a tray having two cups of steaming hot tea.

Mr. I - Not really. If it were criminals I had to chase, then for you it would have been fun. But really, I have a boring job of busting a smuggler's information network.
Ms. A - Smugglers. You don't chase them on seas?
Mr. I - No. It's the coast guards who do it. We just inform them.
Ms. A - Ah. But that reminds me.
Mr. I - What?
Ms. A - How do you know of people informing the smugglers when they must be informing their comrades about you?
Mr. I - How I do it is classified information. But I can tell you that I was sent here because there is one in this society. Very soon my informer spy from their gang is going to identify him for me. And then he'll go down. That'll be the exciting part won't it be.
Ms. A - I don't think so.

Ms. A gives an ultimate cruel smile

Mr. M attacks Mr. I with a flower vase. Mr. I faints to the ground and then Mr. M looks at Ms. A

Scene goes into Ms. A and with her cruel wicked smile

Ms. A - I think you already know it's dangerous to stay here any longer and that too leaving him unfinished.
Mr. M - Just what are you? Sitting there calm and cool?
Ms. A - I knew this was going to happen one day. I guess I was mentally prepared.

Mr. M runs into the kitchen and then comes out with a knife in hand... goes out of the scene and two seconds later the camera pans towards the dead body where Mr. M has already stabbed Mr. I and is now looking towards Ms. A with intent.

Ms. A - What now?

Silence

Ms. A - Uncomfortable? Come to my flat then. It's safe, and we can sort out this mess there.

Both Ms. A and Mr. M go out with Mr. M looking at Ms. A with killing intent

Scene fades out black. Heavy Music. Fades in or Pans in over the shoulder of a man reading a newspaper. In the newspaper, the focus goes into or zooms into a report

= COP AND CRIMINAL FOUND DEAD IN TWO SEPARATE FLATS =
DD/MM/YY, Location
On the evening of DAY, a Senior Inspector was found dead in his flat. He had just moved in this flat and was investigating a gang of smugglers. His death was due to multiple stabs with a knife, which surprisingly was found near the second dead body, which was identified as the informant of the smuggler network. However the flat, in which his body was found was empty for 4 years, while his own flat was next door. The cause of death of the criminal was idenified by the police as suicide....

(The following scene is in flashback mode using sepia, solarize, noisy TV effect or what ever)

Scene fades in where Mr.M sits on the sofa and And scene follows Mr. I going into the kitchen.

Mr. I - I'll be with you in a minute.

Scene goes up-to the window where Mr. M walks up-to the window. Then the scene pans back and no one is sitting on the sofa.

Mr. M - So. What do you do?
Mr. I - Make coffee for guests. (Laughs)
Mr. M - Ah! Yes. Indeed. (Laughs as well...)
Mr. I - But on a serious note. I'm a Senior Inspector.
Mr. M - Ah! Police. Must be a fun life.

Mr. I comes into the scene with a tray having two cups of steaming hot tea.

Mr. I - Not really. If it were criminals I had to chase, then for you it would have been fun. But really, I have a boring job of busting a smuggler's information network.
Mr. M - Smugglers. You don't chase them on seas?
Mr. I - No. It's the coast guards who do it. We just inform them.
Mr. M - Ah. But that reminds me.
Mr. I - What?
Mr. M - How do you know of people informing the smugglers when they may be spying on you?
Mr. I - How I do it is classified information. But I can tell you that I was sent here because there is one in this society. Very soon my informer spy from their gang is going to identify him for me. And then he'll go down. That'll be the exciting part won't it be.
Mr. M - I don't think so.

Mr. M gives an ultimate cruel smile

4 comments:

Shriti said...

niceeeeee :D

tharangni said...

its good! looks like a real movie script! X)

>>RE<<
@Selenium: In fairy stories/tales it is believed that if a mortal[human] was to drink/eat anything given by the fairies, then he/she will become a fairy immediately and will never ever carve for human food again. and the Fairy Drink is one among them :)

tharangni said...

hey!! sure u can use it! ^_^ and thanks for the advise on syllables! :)

Samadrita said...

Ah the perfect script for a thriller!
Liked it. Write more :)